And sometimes a dark and witty way of thistle
You remind me of splashing waves and a blissful path
and also about a rain crashing the night all apart.
You make me think of a moving breeze and a huge waterfall
And a stormy sky full of messy thunderstorm
You are just like a night blooming Jasmine
That rambles wildly in the wood
Like a carpet of grass in early spring
That tickles and kneads the bare foot
Your very simple nature makes me seek you
My heart always kneels and prays to perceive you
To me your presence is like a different world
While your absence leaves me completely swirled
You just rightly fill up beneath my eyes-lash
You are indeed an all new definition of romance

you have nicely put your thoughts across...Bt this time i felt that the writing could have been improved a bit. The words used are excellent which describes ur excellent vocabulary but i feel the way in which they have been been put cud have been different. But over all it was a great effort..:)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for being honest on your comments.... m sure it will really help me to make an improvement further...
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